The Board

[marcel]

Don't know if I'll make it big, but it would be nice.

m f

[Bartwald]

Here's the breakdown, marcel - in its much promised honesty.

What I didn't like:

- the sound: some of the sound effects were jump-up-loud while some of the dialogue lines were kind of muted, almost impossible to be heard,
- the acting... though not exactly ALL of it; there were good moments, too, usually when the actors were chattering in a more friendly and everyday way - the monologues or longer lines of dialogue usually sounded artifcial,
- the pacing: in my opinion there were many scenes in the film that could have been made shorter; the opening credits, too - I do like this song there but it shouldn't go on forever,
- the editing: now, I know it's a low budget affair but the problem is that this kind of story cannot, in my opinion, be told without good editing; all the many long shots could be chopped into smaller bits so that the visuals would mirror the craziness and weirdness of the plot - some of the acting problems would be solved this way, too.

What I liked:
- the reaper actress - her lines often sounded artificial, too, but there's some potential, I guess,
- the intro song (but the opening credits still should be made shorter),
- the idea: because it shows you're ambitious (however, I do think this script should be rather used for, like, your fifth or sixth feature, when you have the tools and experience for making it work properly).

I wonder what the other members of our board think of Zippy? And by the way - I'll copy it for spacer, so you can expect feedback from our resident scientist and a lover of all things crazy.

Thanks again, marcel!

[marcel]

okay, thanks for the feedback

m f